Blog Post #12
IOC Practice
Good evening my loyal fans
Prep Sheet
IOC Practice
I'm sorry in advance.
IOC Grading
Criterion A: 6
My knowledge of the text was fairly in depth and I was able to zoom in and out. However, I wasn't always effective in my reasoning in my opinion.
Criterion B: 5
I thought that the diction and juxtaposition analysis was solid and worked well. I wasn't extremely fond of the repetition analysis but I didn't put too much emphasis on it.
Criterion C: 4
There was definitely organization. I just did an intro, body, and conclusion. It seemed effective and coherent to me.
Criterion D: 4
It's real "uh" and "um" season hours. However, I thought my language and word choice was pretty good so I hope my "uh" didn't harm me too much.
Dude, what are you talking about? This was so good. Your thesis was bangin'. I will say that you did use a copious amount of "um"s, but your general language was excellent. I didn't find the filler words to detract from your argumentation. There were a few times when I'd recommend trying to "up" your diction- I was particularly amused when you mentioned that Lady Macbeth found Macbeth "too kind" and wanted him to a "cooler person," more "a-okay with killing." However, I'll say that you have a natural inclination towards presentation. I was impressed. Frankly, I was impressed with the whole thing- you're super clear and you routinely bring your thesis back into your examination. My main recommendation outside of the language component would be to bring the author's intentions and historical contextualization into the introduction. Otherwise- excellent, my guy. You have no need to be concerned.
ReplyDeleteConnor, I totally agree with Anne Ross' assessment of your thesis. Bangin. Also, your mention of how the gender roles are brought out throughout the book are pretty interesting. The use of the "unsex me" soliloquy was perfect for your point. I'm gonna be honest and say I clicked the bar to see how far along the recording was and it reset me like 5 minutes in, and I didn't keep on. But, I think how you kept back to the thesis and used really specific textual evidence was great.
ReplyDeleteConnor:
ReplyDelete- A bit more lead-in about the text as a whole- title, author, year of publication, AND a brief summary- before zooming in to the passage itself.
- Good structure and organization; strong thesis. Be sure you keep linking back to those key ideas to prove how they are developed in the passage
- Make sure you are really looking at the passage ONLY- there are places where you are kinda veering into "book club" (2:25)
A: 6
B: 6
C: 4
D: 4